Hey all! I've not written on here for a while, but I'm scratching my head while writing this scene. There are two boys, and in some sentences it is ambiguous as to who I am referring to. I've simplified the sentence so that context is irrelevant:
'When Jack first started mocking John, he had protested.'
The 'he' should refer to John, but that's not clear. 'When Jack first started mocking John, John had protested.' sounds clumsy. Should I just abandon this structure and go with 'John had protested when Jack first starting mocking him.'?
Any thoughts much appreciated! As I say, I've simplified the sentence so I don't have to explain the context - I'm more interested in the CONVENTION, and general rules than Jack mocking John.