Hi, I've already posted this, and an earlier version of it, in the Children's Books and YA Authors writing group. Thanks for the excellent feedback on my earlier version. I realise now that this peer-to-peer critiques forum is probably the best place to ask for feedback now because I'm not sure that my book is really YA. I just thought it was because it had teenage protagonists. Also, in my early explorations of Townhouse, I'd not really spotted this forum.
My book is set in a 'dystopian' future Britain which is genderless - everyone is a 'neut' (I won't go into why for now). Except that some babies have started to develop in the pregnancy pods with clear gender (or actually sex), which is seen as an abnormality.
Chapter 1 (attached) is about a boy (Joe) travelling to an island - a safe haven for gendered teens. Chapter 2 introduces us to the island and some of the other characters that Joe gets to know. Chapter 3 is then written in first person by one of Joe's parents, taking us back to when they first learnt that their baby was going to be a 'boy'. About 60% of my chapters are telling Joe's adventures from the point of arriving at the island onwards, which includes having to leave and travel back across neut Britain with two friends. About 35% is Joe's parent telling the story of his birth and upbringing and eventually converging with Joe's own story. The remaining few chapters are extracts from a scientist's logbook from >100 years in the past.
I'd love some feedback on the writing itself, now that I've revised it. Also, any thoughts on genre and age I should be aiming this at, based on what I've described? Thanks.