Comment to 'Does this come across as racist? Or, as it is intended, as an explanation of a misunderstanding?'
  • Hi Georgina, Thank you for posting this. It's clear why Cat reacts as she does, but it's presented in a 'telly' way. As a result, for me, the  text reads at times like a pamphlet, as though you wanted to demonstrate something.

    I assume that it must be important that the man be black for some reason connected with who Cat is, but I don't know why.  I recognise from my own experience that's it difficult to account for all this in an excerpt.

    Unfortunately, I have little time, so I've taken the liberty of inserting comments directly in the ms. Normally, I wouldn't do this without asking you first, and I hope that you won't mind.

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