Comment to 'The cold light of day. Short Story'
  • There was nothing saying what you wanted, but I'm assuming you're looking for feedback...

    This was a very disturbing story, which kept me reading to the end... so good job there! Its a sad look at a world I thankfully know nothing about, but you made me believe every word... 

    Some editing still required (for example, when he goes to Gerry's, "it takes about a half hour to get AN to answer TO his doorbell..." You probably mean either GET HIM TO ANSWER HIS... or GET AN ANSWER TO HIS... in either case, too many TO 😝 .

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    • Thank you. Good to know it held you and was believable. I should have said what I was looking for, I suppose I assumed it was a given. What genre would you put this in?

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