Having just read the 'In the Beginning' document I was intrigued by the plot. I also noticed the following that you wrote;
“Comrade Pavlov, what kind of stuff are drinking?"
Should that be;
“Comrade Pavlov, what kind of stuff are 'you' drinking?"
But without the single quotes?
Good first page by the way, lots of information neatly imparted without slowing the action, and enough skullduggery to prod the 'what's this?' cells in my brain.
Many thanks for the comment. No matter how many re-reads a typo always turns up!