Comment to 'First Chapter Feedback - Potential Novel'
  • First of all, cool idea! I loved the synopsis you provided (above), it caught my imagination, and make me curious to see how you proceeded...

    I quite enjoyed the chapter - it needs editing of course, some tense issues, and minor spelling  oops... but the story line felt solid to me, and I wanted to know who phoned!

    I too work at home, though I have for years, so I can't blame Covid 😬 ... but finding TIME to write is always one of the hardest things - I can get lost in the story, and then nothing that makes money gets done.... or I can work, and the stories nag at the back of my mind.

    Like you, I joined here for feedback on my work - not necessarily planning/hoping to publish, but wanting to improve. What I learned was how much I had to learn (!), which has led to a LOT of workshops - many of them great lectures available free here.

    If you can make the time, I think you should continue... I for one would love to read more. Good luck!

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    • Hi Jo. Thanks for taking the time to read and give your feedback. I'm glad I'm not alone in trying to find the time to write! I would love to be able to sit and let my imagination run wild on the page but sadly reality often stops that. Having a two year old at home means time is limited but your feedback as encouraged me to carry on trying to make some time.

      I'm glad you enjoyed the premise and the first chapter. I agree it needs a lot of editing. I think tense and my voice have become a bit confused with the stop-start nature of my writing. I'm hoping when it's done to be able to book some holiday for work and commit real time to editing and sorting out the flow of the story.

      While I say I don't know if I'll continue any further, I realise now that I feel passionately enough about the story that I need to see how it finishes, for myself as much anything.

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