Hi Jo. Thanks for taking the time to read and give your feedback. I'm glad I'm not alone in trying to find the time to write! I would love to be able to sit and let my imagination run wild on the page but sadly reality often stops that. Having a two year old at home means time is limited but your feedback as encouraged me to carry on trying to make some time.
I'm glad you enjoyed the premise and the first chapter. I agree it needs a lot of editing. I think tense and my voice have become a bit confused with the stop-start nature of my writing. I'm hoping when it's done to be able to book some holiday for work and commit real time to editing and sorting out the flow of the story.
While I say I don't know if I'll continue any further, I realise now that I feel passionately enough about the story that I need to see how it finishes, for myself as much anything.