Comment to 'Thoughts on first line'
  •  No, there's nothing wrong with starting with a question but the question you've used here doesn't really spark my interest. What's your second line? 

    Maybe if you used something that could be considered 'wrong' in the question it would grab the reader more. I don't know your story but just to give you an example: "Was it wrong to talk to strange men in the subway?" or "Was it wrong to want your best friend to fail miserably?"

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    • I hadn't thought of that. Good point. As Georgina notes below, I'm trying to establish that the MC is lonely. So the first two lines read "Was it wrong to want someone to talk to? At first it hadn't seemed like too much for Eleanor to expect from her new school." I will mull it over some more.

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