Comment to 'ROOTS, a short excerpt posted for feedback'
  • Jon, Thanks for reading and commenting. Very helpful. I thought this piece might be a bit slow, as it happens in a subplot and does not have the action / suspense of the main plot. Always good to see it through other eyes. Cheers!

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    • I actually quite like the occasional gentler pace and pause for reflection in a book. And, for me at least, this didn't feel slow at all.

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      • Entirely agree, a wonderful "soft - human" extract. Something I have tried to capture but have often been put off by advice to be more "snappy". I believe that it is important to capture these kinds of moments. 

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