Jon, Thanks for reading and commenting. Very helpful. I thought this piece might be a bit slow, as it happens in a subplot and does not have the action / suspense of the main plot. Always good to see it through other eyes. Cheers!
Entirely agree, a wonderful "soft - human" extract. Something I have tried to capture but have often been put off by advice to be more "snappy". I believe that it is important to capture these kinds of moments.