Comment to 'Feedback on a scene'
  • Although the talk of being cleansed from wrongdoings makes sense of your allusion to baptism. Could you perhaps leave it in but say 'any wrongdoings' instead of 'his wrongdoings' or use a less strong word in place of wrongdoings, e.g. failings?

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    • Thank you for your suggestion, Paul. It didn’t even occur to me, that could actually work well.

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