Comment to 'Feedback request - Contemporary Fantasy opening chapters'
  • Hi Lynn,

    I liked the beginning of this and felt the characters were well drawn. Most of the above comments mirror my own. I dooubt I have much to add but the travel scene did make me lose interest. In one of my own novels, I lost an agent over the same 'getting to one place from another' situation. I have now cut it out almost in its entirety. I think as we are writing sometimes, that we feel the need to take the reader on our character's journey, forgetting that a lot of people hate car trips.

    Great potential here, though. Good luck with the agenting thing!

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    • Hi Connie and thanks so much for this. I'm so glad you felt it had promise. 

      Rewriting the opening right now - and cutting chunks of the journey out as I go! Maybe I'll take another look and cut even more... I'll reread (again :) ) and revise.

      Thanks for taking the time to read it. 

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