Comment to 'What's the elevator pitch for your WIP?'
  • Beef or chicken? The passengers onboard the flight chose their meal. But someone else is chosing their destiny.

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    • Thanks, Robert. That is better!

       

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      • Depending when it's set, that might need to be "Beef, chicken, or veggie?"

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        • Hi Iain, I like the pitch, and Robert and Rick's suggestions, though I think giving at least a hint as to who the someone is would add tension. "But a passenger with a gun/grudge/heart attack will choose their destiny." Sorry those are awful cliches - for illustrative purposes only.

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