understood. thanks all for the comments/suggestions. i worked on that for a long time - admittedly not a year. since coming to this site i feel like my momma dropped me on my head as a child... sharp learning curve, lots of new things to think about. but i'm a junkie now - see the potential for story in just about everything - so there's no deliverance, and i must continue forward. feedback is always appreciated to drag me out of my own private idaho.
I relate to the feeling of being dropped on your head. This place is full of steep learning curves. Part of me looks at all the clever stuff people put on here and thinks “Oh my God, I will never be a proper writer!” but the other part is strangely addicted and keeps learning more and thinking “Oh my God, one day I will be a proper writer!”