Comment to 'What's the elevator pitch for your WIP?'
  • Driven by nightmares and determination, naive and secretive Jester Lewis resolutely confronts an alien menace. But is that enough to earn the love of his father?

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    • I like this, Hennessy. Do we need to know Jester is naive and secretive? It seems enough that he's driven, is confronting something huge, and is doing it all to earn his father's love.

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      • Can one be determined but not driven? It seems that one of those words is sufficient, probably the verb.

        Thanks for sharing.

        Michael

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