Comment to 'Feedback on reworked Chap 1'
  • Hi  Robert

    Thank you so much!  This is really helpful and I really appreciate you spending the time on this!  Yes you're right I have let those adverbs creep back in!  I do go through and purge them every now and again but when I re-write sections I forget again.  I will have a think about the hook, it arrives a little later on in the next chapter so maybe a re-jig needed.  I will think.  Thank you again!

    All the best 


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