I love the query letter - the dry humour shines through and gives it a real edge. I had a few comments on the synopsis, which I'm sending back to you as an attachment.
Thank you, I really appreciate your comments, especially on the synopsis! That's the bit I'm struggling with.
And you're the only one so far to pick up on hawthorn, so thank you! I shall amend my MS too. Could have been embarrassing!