Well, it's been a rough winter so far. The isolation in this part of the US has been really tough and my ability to get online has been spotty at best. I've been hard at work though and have finished my rewrite (again), fashioning my story based on JW online courses and the fantastic feedback from my peers here. Now it's time for the all important query letter/synopsis. I'm tackling one at a time (since my brain is still kind of mush from pushing out 117,000 words in three months). If anyone would be kind enough to offer their opinions, I would be grateful. I'm wanting to go through with the Agent 121 on the JW side but the feature isn't working at the moment (it seems to be stuck in December), so that gives me time to sharpen up. Most appreciated.
Dear (Agent Name)
I am seeking representation for my first novel Clouds of Separation, an 117,000 word science fiction novel exploring prejudice and self-doubt in a post-apocalypse setting.
“You’re a monster.”
It’s all Micah has heard in the ten years since he awoke from his encounter with the Cloud, memories locked behind a dark curtain in his mind, body mutated by the Cloud’s cruel touch. His home village of Skykom fears him for how he looks. He fears them for how they treat him. But he awoke with something else: the power of the Blessed, a thing no man on earth has ever possessed. Micah fears the power inside him even more for it only comes when he is angry or fearful. To use it would make him the monster they believe him to be.
When a new Cloud attack devastates Skykom, Micah flees into the unknown ruins of the world, seeking a new home where prejudice and fear don’t exist. Instead, he finds the Norads, a brutal race of mutated conquerors who will stop at nothing to learn the secret of Micah’s powers. Trapped in the ruins of an ancient city, Micah finds himself caught between two societies, separated by a century of hate, suffering beneath the Norad’s cruel hand. Micah must find a way to bridge the gulf between them and embrace the power that lies dormant within him before the Norads destroy them all.
While I have no writing credits yet, I belong to and have benefitted greatly from the Jericho Writers workshop online writing and drafting courses as well as the Jericho Townhouse conversation forums where I’ve been able to work with my peers to enhance my understanding of the craft.
Thank you for your time and consideration in this matter.