Hi Rick, I note you are no longer looking for feedback on this version, but my comments are of a global nature that should maintain their relevance (if you agree they have relevance) in a restructure.
Whatever you change, please keep the essence of: He did not crave adulation or recognition. He wished only for an opportunity at direction in his life. All efforts to claim a place on his own had seen him pushed away: rejected. Denied the right to even try. And: Time and again, people had shown him just how much less significant his life was than he thought.
These are the words that connected me to the character – Marvelous – considering this isn’t my kind of story.
For what my opinion is worth, my vote for restructuring this beginning, would be to have the first line of chapter one as: I beg you, my King, to allow me a life.
All the best