Hey LIbby, it's lovely to hear from you.
I've spent a day in rewrite mode and many of the changes now seem so obvious (there will be heaps more to find and construct). I'm so glad I put the story up. It was a kill your darlings thing too, as I was so invested in the different characters I couldn't let go of them to focus on Jimmy.
I have been reading short stories - the Canadian's Alice Munro and Margaret Atwood for example. We have a writer here, Owen Marshall, who is from my home town and even taught at my secondary school. Unfortunately not when I was there! He has quite a rap as a short story writer. See if you can get your hands on his harrowing "Coming home in the dark" It blows me away that he wrote something like that and taught at an all-girls school.
My lesson today is to read to learn, rather than read to be entertained.
Still so green ....
Have a lovely weekend