I'm fairly new and haven't posted anything before. I have just been having a look around and a read. what a great place!
I have written a crime thriller set in the beautiful Florida Keys. I would be really grateful for any feedback on my synopsis. I haven't written one before and I'm not sure if I'm on the right track. It's very difficult to put it all in such a few words. I have used the JW template for ideas.
Thank you so much
Alice Delaney hands in her warrant card at the London police station. She’s ready to join the Monroe County Sheriff’s office in the Florida Keys, her birthplace. She hopes it will work out as she’ll be an outsider. She also won’t have Steve, her oldest friend, sometime lover, and colleague by her side anymore. Alice is enjoying the slower pace of the Keys until she’s called to investigate the rape and murder of a young mother, Marcia Jones. The brutality shocks the neighbourhood. Marcia is nearly decapitated. What’s worse is that Marcia’s five-year-old son witnessed it all while hiding in the closet. The violence of the rape threatens to unravel Alice’s unresolved, buried trauma stemming from her own rape years before.
Well-connected family man Mark Lloyd studies all the police activity from his motorbike. Lloyd is omitted from the witness list, so Alice decides to go and interview him herself. Jeff Gaits a local FBI agent asks Alice if he can go with her. Jeff is investigating a separate drug case which involves Lloyd’s son. No one suspects Mark Lloyd, who is lauded around town for doting on his sick wife. However, Alice feels uneasy about Lloyd, so she decides to take a closer look at him, but Lloyd is onto her.
Lloyd watches Alice at home from his boat. Nancy, the deputy tasked with guarding Marica’s orphaned son, is staying with Alice. Lloyd hatches a plan. He waits for the opportune moment, enters Alice’s house and spikes her wine. Thankfully, Alice’s paranoia from her past ordeal saves her. Jeff has a revealing conversation about Alice’s past with Steve on the telephone, and Steve books the next flight to Florida. Nancy is missing and Alice finds traces of a date rape drug in a glass at Nancy’s house. Lloyd has Nancy chained up. He brutalises Nancy, films it, and sends it to Alice. After having his location uncovered, Lloyd makes his last stand, holding Nancy hostage at Alice’s house. Alice remembers a crawl space which leads into her house. Lloyd smirks as he sees Alice with her gun pointed at him; he has Nancy’s neck taped to a shotgun with his finger on the trigger. Alice shoots him through the wrist disabling his hand. Shocked, he puts his other hand up in surrender. Too late. Alice shoots him in the head, killing him instantly.
The Mayor, a close associate of Lloyd’s, wants Alice’s badge, but the Sheriff has other ideas. He leaks compromising pictures of the Mayor with the Lloyds to the press. Jeff nervously drives to pick Alice up for a date. He is still confused about Alice and Steve’s relationship. Steve hooked up with another woman, taking comfort in the knowledge that Alice is in safe hands. Jeff hoped she’ll tell him about her friendship with Steve in time.