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Hi Mark,

I confess I usually skim intros in my haste to get to the good stuff. Occasionally one resonates. That said, my personal take would be to cut to the gist of the situation and begin with paragraph 4. Like you, I enjoy and sometimes write about those experiences that resonate and beg to be remembered. 

Here's my edited version of paragraph 4 (which to me is enough said....though others may, and probably will, differ):

 When reading fiction, I tend to reach for stories that feel real, feel possible; stories that, as tumultuous as they may be, could easily be happening down the road. The setting and the protagonists may be what we call ordinary, but the events are often extraordinary. New beginnings, loves, deaths happen every day. All of them unique, all of them deeply moving, at least to the people involved. As we walk through life we sometimes catch glimpses of other lives: couples waving their arms at each other silently in a car while stuck in traffic, people limping home at seven in the morning in full evening attire, little old ladies doing their shopping dressed entirely in black. These are the things worth noticing. These are the things that remind us of our humanity. And these are the situations, at times, where we might be called upon to help. 

You intrigue me with the people limping home and the ladies dressed in black. I want to get to those stories. The babies not so much.  You might suggest the efforts to 'help' often turn into situations that are possibly otherwise.

I'm just 'less is more' mindset, especially as I get older. Hope these  comments help.

Connie

These look good! Others have already voiced any comments I might add. My preference for your name is the first one.

In a post on men's fiction, I am receiving replies to comments that I did not make. The posts are shown as 'unknown' on my screen. If someone is impersonating me, I'd like to know who it is. This is unprofessional. Jericho, please be advised of the problem!!!!


Rob, this was not my comment. Not sure how it came to be attributed to me. Parliament? Really?

How is this in reply to me? I never commented on this post? Jericho? Who's impersonating me?

Believe, I would not have something to say about Parliament. Congress maybe, but these are not my words.


All I know is 'Lolita'. Guess I'll have to brush up on my Nabokov! Reading 'The Gold Coast' by Nelson DeMille right now. His characterization is spot on.


I got Vladimir Nabokov.....I don't know what to say......

Sons of Gods is my fav.

Ancient Genes? Genesis of the Gods? Awakening of the Gods? Ancient Gods Arise?  

This is like a word game!

Added a comment to Cover impact 

Hi Rob,

How to choose? My only comment is that the series title is so much larger than the book title. I would reverse that so people don't think they're reading the same book but with a newly released cover. "A Voice at Culloden" is more appealing to me than "When Gods Clash". When quickly glancing across your post, I thought they were all the same book. 

Typeface comments by others seem legit. Is 'clash' the word you want to use?

You're close, but tweak it to be fabulous!

Thank you. Life is a series of short stories, wouldn't you say?


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