Hi folks, I am so delighted with your wonderful feedback and very grateful to each of you! These are great insights, things I completely overlooked. I think after a while you just get a bit snow blind and fail to see the obvious!
Just a few things to say in response. A friend of mine (a published author herself) wrote this short synopsis for me a few years ago. She loved the book and really championed me at that time and I used this synopsis ever since. So I agree that it sounds like a blurb in parts. I should have taken this in hand sooner and rewritten myself but I found it so hard as it was so episodic. Also I should have mentioned that the book is very much centred around cafes. In fact every chapter is the name of a cafe and was originally a sort of quirky narrative guide book.
A small thing re the J character. You're right Paul. I shouldn't have used the single initial. In the book I thought it might add some intrigue but it really doesn't! Thanks for that. I will def amend that!
The first two chapters were the hardest to write though I've rewritten by now a million times! The rest of the book probably has more humour in it than these initial chapters which are always harder as it's the setting up. So I've bitten the bullet and attached the 3 chapters here and really I hope you'll enjoy the read - if nothing else a nice bit of escapism to Paris while we're in lockdown! I'll attach the query letter too in case it's hard to see.
Thank you all guys. I'll take a look at what you're all at writing wise too!😊👍
And Libby just re reading the editing on the query letter - that is just fantastic, thank you, thank you!