Jimmy

I'd like to share this rework of a seemingly controversial short story I posted a while back. Hopefully this one is more clear, and has less potential to provoke.

As usual, all thoughts, comments, suggestions are most welcome. 

Hello Townhouse. I'd like to pick your brains.

I've recently written a short story that is set in Kentucky, using first person narrative. I deliberately used English spellings, because I wanted to focus more on the geographic and the terminolgy of my character, rather than wanting myself as the writer to appear American. However, I gave the story to someone near Kentucky to check for authenticity, and because of their very useful comments, I need to do a rewrite. But, they did say I should change to American spellings. I think they could have a point, only because it is first person, but I'm not convinced. Novels with American and English characters wouldn't have their dialogue's adjusted to suit. I know this is different because it's a short story, but I'm an Englishman.

Do you think it is important? Do you think the spellings need to change, or would third person work better for me?

Thank you. 

Hello Townhouse. This post is to highlight the benefits of this community.

Firstly, due to my introverted nature, and my distrust of things internet, I created the Charlie Brown alias. But, 1)I've slowly began to relax my views and 2)Because everyone here has been so kind and helpful over the past however long I've been a member, recently, I've fellt guilty about misleading you.

So this is me.

Secondly, some good news. Some of you know of my recent shortlisted story entry. Limbic Street to Memory Lane. Romance of the Lost Souls, formerly A Never-Ending Love and the Forgotten Ghosts of Jasper's Park, formerly The Unforgotten Ghosts of Jasper's Park.
Well, it came 3rd place in what I think could be a relatively small press. But, after three years of rejections, and me very nearly giving up trying, this success was really needed. The only reasons the success came about is because of the confidence that being among my peers here has given me. This helped me persevere. Also the feedback that was given on this story was paramount, a big thanks to those who contributed. You know who you are.

Lastly, please don't congratulate. Just accept my deepest gratitude and keep doing what you're all doing. Members and staff included. I've poked my head into other communites, but always end up coming here to touch base, even if I don't talk, I watch and learn.

Here's the link if you'd like to have a look. The story is very slightly altered.  https://www.henshawpress.co.uk/september-2020/

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Hello residents of Townhouse. 

In light of recent conversation about feedback being publicly accessible, would anyone be willing to recieve a private message containing a piece for a Novellette-in-Flash competition?

It is of just over 4k words.

The requirement was to create small stand alone stories of no more than 500 words each that all fit into the whole narrative arc.

This was written a good few months ago, but the competition was cancelled and has now reopened. 

It hasn't been touched since, and I'm not even going to look at it prior to sending to any willing participants. I believe (or hope at least) that my writing has evolved a little since then, and don't want to tamper with it yet.

Any feedback would be most welcome. Particularly if you think each stories work as stories within themselves. And I suppose I'm kinda wanting to know if it needs a complete rewrite, and need to ask myself if I'm willing to do it.

Thank you. I'm off to write something else now.

This made me chuckle.

https://youtu.be/arj7oStGLkU

Are you a serial procrastinator? If so, how do you overcome it? How do you motivate yourself and get those creative juices flowing? Do you wollow in self loathing or accept it?

Hello everyone. I've pulled a version of an old story out of the archives to play around with, and would appreciate your wise words. If you don't mind.

Hello all.

I was wondering what other feedback/critique websites people use, if any. I recently looked at Scribophile, but would rather not pay the money if it isn't useful. 

Hello wonderful people. Could I please trouble you for feedback on a revised short story I posted a few days ago?  ps, If you haven't read the other one, please read this first so that your views aren't influenced. Thanking you.

Here is a short story that I would love some feedback on. Many thanks in advance.