Alison

  • 792

Hi everyone, I am a writer, former PR, keen gardener. I'm getting ready to query my novel - The River House Mythology - a supernatural family mystery set in Jamaica. I've recently joined Jericho Writers and intend to make the most of all the wonderful content in the coming months.

Relationships
Empty
Alison Discussions
  •  ·  356
  •  · 
Hello everyoneIt's time to post my synopsis - argh - really for a 'does this make sense' read at thi…
  •  · 
  •  · 
  •  · Hi David - thanks for your suggestions, they are helpful edits. I've tried to be succinct without ta…
  •  ·  477
  •  · 
Hi everyoneWhile I'm taking a break from editing the complete manuscript, here I am taking the plung…
  •  · 
  •  · 
  •  · Hi Donna Thanks for taking the time to read and comment, all most useful. I have re-worked the first…

Congratulations on getting such a positive response and very good to know that your genre is in high demand! 

Thank you for highlighting this! Nothing ventured, nothing gained......

Hi Emmaloo

I’m wondering if it would be helpful to remind people on the main discussion thread about the group? Perhaps tabling weekly or fortnightly topic there might encourage more interaction here? I think a lot of people read comments without commenting themselves and when there’s nothing new to read it becomes a circle. I do check in now and again and it would be great to see more posts! 

Hi Lynn 

Congratulations on securing an agent! Fantastic news and vindication of all your hard work, so pleased for you! 

Hi Iren

I liked your chapters and descriptions and am not going to comment on specifics as others have already done so comprehensively. I read your pages when you posted and thought you may be interested in what sticks in my mind now. The opening gives a little tease of the synaesthesia and I think you could make more of this from the start, it's unusual and seems a good 'hook' to draw in readers. I'm wary of suggesting this as others have suggested that I change where my own story starts and that sent me down a rabbit hole for quite a while! - but maybe you could have an incident that occurs before the character goes back to the house that introduces us to the suffering she's been experiencing. Only a suggestion of course, perhaps you prefer to keep the mystery element for a while longer? I also wanted to know a little more about what she is thinking and feeling when she's driving up to the village. Much good luck with your further edits, it's an intriguing premise and I'd definitely read more! 


Hi Julia

Is the Rebecca Horsfall webinar you mention a SFOW one? If so, I wonder if it will be added to the main Jericho site at some point. As a reader I like to have something to think about once a story has finished, so I would be wary of tying everything up too neatly. It sounds like you have the right balance already!

Hi Kathleen

Just seen this - but think your question has been answered already! 

Hi Kathleen - welcome and did you manage to work out how to post? The peer to peer section is really useful for posting a few chapters. Look forward to seeing your work. 

Hi Debbie 

I would echo Kate, Rick and Georgina’s advice. I am going through this very process at the moment. Each time someone new reads the manuscript, I decide what I do and don’t agree with and then start a new draft and revise, then revise again. Having others read and comment on your work is an invaluable learning experience. Each time the manuscript gets stronger (by my humble judgement!) I hope that at some point in the not too distant future, I’ll be ready to pay for a manuscript assessment or go out to query with it. Good luck!

Hi Slago - Getting these openings right is so hard, but I’m glad you found the feedback helpful. I hope others will chime in as well, so you get a good sweep of opinions. I would be happy to read your next chapter - if you want to, post it here - or if you prefer to send direct my email is alisonfoot@icloud.com

Added a comment to 121 Anxiety 

Hi Julie - sounds like a good strategy! And very good luck with the conversation.

Hi Slago

Thanks for posting this. I read the whole extract and really liked it and not only because the San Marino Grand Prix is the only one I've attended in real life! I like the way you unravel the weird 'talent' the young boy has, his ability to 'predict/see' the future. In the motor racing parts, all the concrete references to the drivers and their placings bring it to life. The part that maybe confused me a bit was where he remembers not being picked for the football match as a nine year old. He's looking back on it as a 14 year old, but also bringing in the fact that he's shared this moment with his mate many times. I think it's just the mechanics of the scene but I had to go back and read it again to properly understand it. Those were just my first impressions. I'm sure someone will provide more specific edits, but the piece held my attention and now I want to know about the football match! 

Info
Gender:
Woman
Full Name:
Alison
Friends count:
Followers count:
Membership
Standard