OhMyGOSH!! This has been such a challenging and illuminating exercise. I must have written about 30 different (mostly terrible) elevator pitches since the session, and about the same number before, over the long painful years of trying to get this novel into a publish-able state.
BUT.... BUT... (!!!!!) I think I've FINALLY cracked it (after much walking, wailing, gnashing of teeth and mainlining of coffee). And ALSO I think it's going to completely revolutionise Draft 15hundred&thirtyseven. It's going to have to be a rewrite.
But it's now going to be a rewrite with focus and purpose.
harrybingham THANK YOU so much! I never really "got" elevator pitches before the session, even though I recognised a good one when I saw it. You have completely nailed it for me. So here's the pitch:
Hannah (13) and Josh (3) are left to fend for themselves on a tough London estate.
They think their brilliant mum’s in Hollywood but tragically she’s been Sectioned.
Mum's ‘dreams’ threaten to tear the family apart, while Hannah fights to hold all their dreams together.
ALL feedback (be brutal I can take it) gratefully received.
PLUS you really liked the pitch for my next book, Mr Bingham - The Munchausen by Proxy one - so I think it's got legs and I'm cracking on with the first draft, in between bouts of tearing my hair out and project managing a 12 year old with online school refusal and an Alan Sugar complex.
Blessings on everyone's head.